Wednesday, October 14, 2009

Riding the Dirt Bike of Sucess

Objects or priceless moments can be rank on all kinds of different value scales. Personally I don’t value things by cost or how fancy it is. I know other people can value things on how expensive they are or how fancy they are but not me. I couldn't put a price on the feeling i got when i had won the championship game or when i ride my dirt bike and listen to the way the engine gears climb as the speed increases. There is no price for that and you can't find in a store. Today I will share with you items that i value and price is not a factor.

It was just an ordinary fall day. It was windy and nippy out when a black and white tow truck was backing in to the driveway of 6 Sunrise Circle (My Driveway) and on the back was a black Dr-Z 125cc engine Suzuki dirt bike and it was mine. Once I realized that that was mine I almost hit the ceiling when I leaped out of my seat to go check it out. I have been begging my parents for one for ever but they finally came to their senses. I put on my shoes and bolted outside faster than Usain Bolt in the 100 meter dash. After the man came out of the tow truck got all the paperwork done and after all of that boring stuff I sat on the bike and the black leather seat felt a fluffy white cloud in the sky. I decided to start of the beastly 125cc engine. I pulled out the kick start and gave a kick. The engine purred like a tomcat. I value my dirt bike because when the engine is shifted into fifth gear and your traveling so fast everything else is a blur then it is a peaceful environment.

This was my last year playing CYO Basketball for St. Patrick’s Church and my basketball team made it to the championship game. We were playing a team that had lost to us by about two points when we last played them in the regular season. They had a center that was about 6’2” and a guard that could make it rain from downtown. Let’s fast forward to the fourth quarter. There is about 2 minutes left on the clock and we are up by five. As Though last 2 minutes whine down they score a lay to decrease our lead. Then all of a sudden the make another lay up and we are only up by one with a minute left. After them stealing the ball and putting up a third 2 pointer we are down by 1 with 30 seconds left in the championship game. Our coach calls a timeout to think up scheme on how to score and be the champions. After coming up with idea we hustle back on to the court and wait for the clock to start. We pass it in and the crowd is roaring we pass it to our point guard who then takes it down the lane to score a lay up with 10 seconds left and by the time the other team passed the ball in time had expired and we had become the victors of this championship. I value this win because the work and effort we had to put into it made the victory feel that much better.

I value my dirt bike because when I drive it the engine climbing and the speeding increasing it is almost soothing except for the occasional bump here and there.. It is a rush of adrenaline to drive my dirt bike and to be going 50 miles per hour. I value wining my basketball championship because after the whole season to win the championship is the best feeling in the world and the feeling of success is like no other and can't be taken away from you either. I value these items/moments because they mean a lot to me and without experiencing them now i probably never would have. So having lots of money and just buying anything can not compare to something you have truly worked for or something that is like nothing else on the planet.

1 comment:

  1. I. In this essay, Kevin is saying how he thinks that value is not based on the actual cost on items, and you can't put a price on something that is truely valueble to you. He is saying that he values his dirt bike because he really wanted a dirt bike for a while, and the feeling that he feels when riding his bike is really special. He also values his championship game because that was a really memorable moment in his life.

    II. Kevin describes the day that he got his dirt bike really well- "It was windy and nippy out when a black and white tow truck was backing in to the driveway of 6 Sunrise Circle (My Driveway) and on the back was a black Dr-Z 125cc engine Suzuki dirt bike and it was mine." He used unique words to describe the setting (windy, nippy etc)

    III. The overall strength of this essay was Kevin's voice throughout the paper. He used words that gave the paper extra personality, so you could really tell that Kevin was the author. He did a really good job with this.


    IV. One thing that Kevin needs to fix is in his first paragraph he says - Personally I don’t value things by cost or how fancy it is. - This is really confusing because he says I dont value "things" by the cost or how fany "it" is. They don't agree, so if he changed it to they are, it would not be as confusing. Also, in the paragraph about his CYO championship, he changes tenses - past tense to present tense, so that is also confusing.

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