It was mid April when the first day of the Masters began and Kevin couldn't believe how far he had come from being a little kid wishing to play in the masters to actually qualifying. He beat Tom Dowd to qualify for the masters and now has to focus on playing the first round even though he was a neophyte compared to the other professionals. The first day of the masters Kevin had trouble focusing because of the intense atmosphere. He wishes his dad was there to quell him but he could not make the first round due to a buiness trip. Seeing all the professionals distracted him from the task at hand. The only golfer that he had not seen was the one he lionized the most. Ben Hogan.
After three days of golf Kevin was 2 behind the lead at 15 under. Ben Hogan and Arnold Palmer were tied for the lead at 17 under. Today was the final round to go for the green jacket. Ben Hogan had already finished the front nine and so had Arnold Palmer. Ben was at 3 under for the day and Arnold Palmer was even for the day. Kevin was just finishing the 9th hole that was a par 5 and he pared it. Kevin finished the front nine at 2 under which would put him in second place so far. After finishing Ben Hogan ended up finishing his round at 3 under and Kevin finished at 5 under by sinking a 34 foot putt for birdie on 18 which would put him and Ben Hogan into a sudden death playoff for the green jacket. The crowd was ecstatic after he made that putt but he tried to rebuff them as he talked with his caddie. "Good putt kevin that was a big one", his caddie Eric said. On his way to the scores table Ben hogan came over to him and said," That was a nice putt over there on 18."" Thanks Mr.Hogan. Looks like I'll being playing against you tomorrow." Kevin stated. "It appears so. Well I wish you good luck for it should be a good fight," Ben said to him. Kevin felt a little less nervous after hearing Ben's benediction.
It was raining all last night and went into the next morning so the course was going to be wet. When Ben and Kevin met at the first tee at 8 in the morning. Ben Hogan was selected to tee off first. Kevin had to quiet his loquacious caddie while ben was hitting. "Eric shut up! his hitting"' said kevin in a angry whisper. Ben Hogan was a three time champion at the masters and Kevin had never been in the masters before. They were matching each other shot for shot no one was pulling ahead or behind. When they came upon the 11th hole which was a 190-yard par 3. Kevin decided to hit a 3 iron, which put him 20 feet away from the hole. Ben Hogan hit the same club and was 15 feet away from the hole. Kevin was up first to hit since he was farthest away from the hole. "It looks likes its left to right but whatever you do don't leave it short" Eric said. After finally concuring with Eric, Kevin steps up to the putt and strokes the ball. The crowd is hushed as they slowly watch the ball roll towards the hole and wait for the ‘clunk’ of the ball hitting the cup. Kevin is ecstatic and is now 3 under and leaves Ben Hogan to make his putt to stay tied with Kevin. Ben just misses his putt to the leave of the cup to put Kevin at a one shot lead.
Later on at the 17th hole which is a par 5. Ben Hogan drives his shot 260 yards. Eric says to Kevin"Alright, Your in the lead. Just relax and hit the ball. Ben Hogan then hits his next shot on the green for a lengthy eagle putt and Kevin plays it safe and lays up just short of the green. He asks Eric for the loft wedge and puts it to 5 feet for a birdie opportunity. Ben lets him finish his putt so his ball marker isn’t in the way. He now has to make this putt to become tied with Kevin again going into the 18th hole. After stroking the ball Kevin is thinking that it has no chance but for some reason the ball just kept rolling and the sound of the ball hitting the cup ended the crowds laconic state. Going into the 18th hole they were tied at 4 under par. Kevin was first to tee off and now has trepidation running through his mind. Hogan hit his driver about 10 yards farther.Ben's clubs were vapid and used compared to Kevin's new driver he recently purchased. Ben’s approach shot was on the green but yet again another lengthy putt. Kevin’s approach shot was about a 20 footer for birdie. Ben had to putt first and he spent a good amount of time looking at this putt. All you could hear was the whispering of Ben and Kevin talking to their caddies. He finally stepped up to it and hit that ball with the smoothest looking stroke Kevin have ever witnessed. Putting requires a lot of dexterity. The ball was heading right for the hole and it was dead on but it started to slow down a little earlier then he expected and stopped 10 inches short of the hole. The crowd sighed and was in shock that he missed that putt but he tapped the ball in and they started to applaud him for finishing 4 under on the day. Kevin had his putt left and was the biggest putt of his life. There was now a myraid of people surrounding the green. He spent about 30 minutes looking at this putt from every angle. Eric was trying to give him an assuaging pep talk but it wouldn't stop Kevin's hands from shaking. He stepped up and stroked the ball towards and the whole and the crowd was just starring at that ball which was headed straight for the hole. He started to walk towards the hole and once he saw that ball drop he jumped in the air as high as he could jump. This would surely be the apex of his career. “Kevin Garbacik, a Cinderella story, has just won the Masters ladies and Gentlemen.” The announcer screamed. The crowd was going wanton and was rushing on to the green. They all thought Kevin was a paragon of golf. They were chanting his name.
After the round of golf Ben Hogan and the head of the master association holding the trophy and the green jacket. Now it is a tradition that the previous winner of the Masters would give the new winner the green jacket. The previous winner just happened to be Ben Hogan. Kevin walked up too Ben and as he congratulated him he put on his own green jacket.” The one player that no ever thought of winning has done the impossible today Ladies and Gentlemen”, stated the announcer.
I- The conflict is trying to beat Ben Hogan at the Masters for the green jacket. It is person vs. person. It was external. It was resolved by Kevin winning the Masters.
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III- "He started to walk towards the hole and once he saw that ball drop he jumped in the air as high as he could jump. “Kevin Garbacik, a Cinderella story, has just won the Masters ladies and Gentlemen.” The announcer screamed." This was my favorite part because Kevin made his putt to win the Masters.
IV- The tale's best quality is the organization of the story.
VI- I think Kevin could use more dialogue so that so story gets more exciting.
I. The conflict of the story is between Ben and Kevin, so it is an external conflict. The two guys are battling it out at a golf match to win the Masters, and it is resolved when Kevin wins. I thought there was also an internal conflict within Kevin, to keep his focus throughout the match. I was very much invested in the resolution, because I wanted Kevin to win because he was the underdog. I think if the story had more detail, it would have been more dramatic.
ReplyDeleteII. The main character changed when he became more focused and confident in himself and reaching his goal of winning. I dont think it was an epiphany moment or anything sudden, I think it was gradual. I think that if the main character did not change, he would have never won the match.
III. My favorite part of the story was - "The crowd is hushed as it slowly watches the ball roll towards the hole and wait for the ‘clunk’ of the ball rolling in the hole." I really liked this, because I thought the description really engages the reader, and made the story more interesting. I also really liked when Kevin said the "Cinderella story" from the announcer, I thought it was really creative, and gave the story it's theme.
IV. I think the story's best quality was the story arc. I think it all of the right components, and each part was necessary and relevant to the conflict and theme. I thought it was organized really well.
V. The theme is tht anything is possible, and the underdog CAN win even against all odds. This blooms throughout the story because in the beginning he says how he isnt totally focused and not as experienced as the other golfers.
VI. I think the main thing is that he needs more detail. I thought that the parts of the story that had the detail were really good, so I think if he adds more then his story would be really realllllly good :). Also, he needs to add his vocab words and dialogue. One last thing is that he says Ben and Kevin a lot in the story, so he should take a couple out and just say he when it fits.
Neophyte, Quell, Rebuff, Concur, Loquacious, Laconic, Trepdation, Vapid Dexterity, Myraid, Assuage, Wanton, Apex, Benediction, Lionize
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