Wednesday, March 10, 2010
Commitment
Choices are made every day of our lives whether we should get a cup coffee this morning or a glass of juice. The decisions we make affect our lives. There are certain decisions that may betough and others that are tolerable to but you must make a decision and stick with it. I remember when I had to choose between a new phone or a dirt bike. I chose the dirt bike and it was the better choice for me because I love riding my dirt bike and turns out that the phone I wanted wasn’t even that good and they cam out with a new edition of that model the next week. In The Old Man and the Sea the main character Santiago faces tough and suspenseful decisions in which affected his life. He made a decision and he stuck by it. Unfortunately for him some of these decisions did not work out the way he planned.
One decision that Santiago decided to make was that he left the shore without the boy in his skiff. This was a bad decision because later on in the story he will acquire the boy’s help that he has offered him numerous times before he has left the shore. The boy seemed some what anxious to help the old man and disobey his parents. He was a devoted worker and never dishonest. He made this decision not for his gain but for the boys because he doesn’t want the boy to get in trouble with his parents and was wary about him coming to fish with Santiago. This shows how much the old man is compassionate about the boys well being. The consequences of this decision were that it took Santiago longer to reel in the fish and that there was a bigger chance of Santiago not reeling in the fish at all. “It is our choices that show who we truly are, far more than are abilities.”-Joanne Kathleen Rowling
Santiago choice of risking starvation and dehydration cost him his strength after he has caught the fish and planned to have a soothing ride home. This prevented him from fighting off the sharks that come to devour his fish. He cannot do this because he has wasted all the strength he had on catching this fish and none for after to go home or fight off enemies of the sea. This part of the story shows to always think ahead and prepare for the future. The old man is very talkative about his decisions to himsef. The old man did not prepare for the sharks so he focused all his energy on reeling up the fish. The man was intelligent when he used his oar and knife after losing his harpoon but did not prepare for after that. “ I am not afraid of tomorrow, for I have seen yesterday and love today.”-William Allen White
Santiago had a decision of letting this big fish go and deciding that it will be to hard to reel up and bring home. The old man is to amazed by its size and beauty that it will bring in a lot of money back home and he can’t even think about letting this thing go. He decided to keep trying to reel the fish in waste all this hard work and time that he put in to capture this beast of a marlin. Santiago was more sad than upset about losing the marlin to the sharks. The moral of this is that something you work at can easily be taken away and that you keep working through the good things and the bad. “Find a job you love and you will never have to work a day in your life.”-Confucius
Santiago made some wise choices throughout the story some beneficial and some not so much but he made a decision and stuck with it. Decisions are made everyday and you might not even know you made a decision but you did. You could just automatically do your homework when you get home but you decided to do it instead of watching T.V. For Example, in the old man and the sea Santiago had some easy decisions and some hard ones. Some of them won’t always be easy but when they are hard you must pick something and go with it.
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1."In The Old Man and the Sea the main character Santiago faces tough decision in which affected his life. He made a decision and he stuck by it." It's pretty clear. The rest of the paragraph was engaging so it rubbed off on the sentence.
ReplyDelete2."Santiago choice of risking starvation and dehydration cost him his strength after he has caught the fish." It seemed very logical even though the qoute wasn't very convinvcing.
3. The opening was great. It started with the general story of choices then grew into the old man and the sea."Choices are made every day of our lives whether we should get a cup coffee this morning or a glass of juice."
4. I believe the qoutes are the weakest aspect of this story. The hardly realate to the arguement. Or if the do they are not explained.
1. The thesis is how Santiago faces tough decisions in his life. He would stick by something he wanted to do. This was determination.
ReplyDelete2. The second to last paragraph is good. I say this because not only did he engage story quotes in the essay, but he used quotes from other people, such as Confucianism. Philosophy quotes are good.
3. The last paragraph was good. It really wrapped everything up in the essay. I like how you said that people don't know they make decisions, but they do. He linked his essay's topic to present-day society.
4. Some of the quotes could've been better. You also lacked usage of story quotes, but the Confucianism one replaces it. Good job.
Again the thesis is about obstacles that are in life everyday. You can tell what the thesis is with no problem.
ReplyDeleteI didn't see any quotes from the book when i read it. Maybe im wrong but i didnt see one.
"Santiago made some wise choices throughout the story some beneficial and some not so much but he made a decision and stuck with it." It wraps his essay up and how Santiagos choices worked in the book.
Add more quotes from the book to Spice up your reading. It will help a lot.
I. This essays thesis is the decision that Santiago had to make the had an effect on him. The thesis was very clear and easy to understand.
ReplyDeleteII. The second example about starving and dehydration was the strongest. It stood out well because the author did a good job of explaining why this affected Santiago.
III. One thing the essay did well was pick its examples. The examples all work with the original thesis, making the essay understandable.
IV. One thing that could improve this essay would be adding quotes from the book. It would be direct evidence that supports the authors examples.
The decisions that Santiago had to make and the way they effected him. It is clear and concise. Its focused and engaging to me.
ReplyDeleteThe example about Santiago starving and dehydration was the strongest. It stood out above the others because it explained a decision he made.
The introduction was done well. It explained the decsions that effected Santiago. It was also very organized.
The weakest aspect of this essay is the quotes. Their should be quotes from the book. Good job. .:BM:.